Got The Shakes
So full up with it
you're quivering-
you stare at me
inscrutable
flinching because
I don't know what it
is I've done
forgot to do
I smile
attempting mystery
never quite sure if I succeed.
I want to be
alluring and mysterious
I'd like to be bright female
sexuality and power.
Your glare
tells me I've missed again.
I start to shake, craving
what comes next.
Blood and breath
fucking and hating
loving you for it
Damn you to hell
I love you for it.
you're quivering-
you stare at me
inscrutable
flinching because
I don't know what it
is I've done
forgot to do
I smile
attempting mystery
never quite sure if I succeed.
I want to be
alluring and mysterious
I'd like to be bright female
sexuality and power.
Your glare
tells me I've missed again.
I start to shake, craving
what comes next.
Blood and breath
fucking and hating
loving you for it
Damn you to hell
I love you for it.
posted by MMM at 1:45 PM
1 Comments:
I like this one up until the last stanza. The lasty stanza seems tired. I've heard it before and it isn't in an original voice. Re-work it or kill it.
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